Wednesday, October 18, 2017

Week 9 Story: Spoiled Girl


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“No, I don’t want to hear another word from you. You are not dating that boy. I won’t allow it!” Mr. Dickens was tired of having the same argument with his daughter. He couldn’t figure out how to make her understand that she was acting like a spoiled, naïve child. She wanted to be treated like an adult, but had no idea how to act like one.

Sandy stomped out her father’s office, making sure to slam the door on her way out. Everyone was being so mean. They didn’t understand her love and just wanted her to be miserable. It was so unfair! Just because Sean was poor didn’t mean anything. He was also super hot and had sexy tattoos. Well, Sandy decided that she was just going to go on a date with Sean anyway. She didn’t care what anyone else thought about it.

The following two months were the happiest of Sandy’s life. Sean gave her rides on his beat up motorcycle, and she got to rub it in to all of her friends that she was dating the hottest guy in school. Her life was exactly the way she wanted it to be, and she thought it would never change. But good or bad, nothing lasts forever.

“What do you mean that you’re going off to college? Don’t be ridiculous. You have to stay here and be my boyfriend!” Sandy stomped her foot in frustration. Sean wasn’t allowed to leave her. It’s not like she could follow him, she was only a sophomore!

“Baby, I know this sucks, but it’s a really good chance for me. I got offered a full scholarship to a really good school. I can’t pass this up. It might be my only chance to make something of myself.” Sean tried to control his temper and be reasonable. He knew that Sandy would miss him when he left, but if she really cared she wouldn’t stand in his way. He was given the opportunity of a lifetime, one that he’d never dreamed he could get. He had a chance to make become better and to make a good life for himself.

“If you leave me I’ll kill myself and it will be all your fault!” Sandy stormed off as she screamed the threat.

Frantic that Sandy would do something crazy, Sean had felt that he didn’t have a choice but to go to her father. He told Mr. Dickens everything, terrified of what might happen. When Sandy got home three hours later, her father and Sean were waiting for her.

“Honey, we need to talk.” Mr. Dickens was worn out, and it showed. “Sean told me what you said. I have been doing everything that I can think of to help you, but nothing has worked. You are a spoiled, selfish and immature child. You lash out when you don’t get your way and you care nothing about other people or their feelings. This cannot continue. I have no choice but to send you to reform school.”

“You’re sending me away, because of what he said. That’s crazy! You didn’t even want me to date him, because he’s poor, but now you’re taking his side,” Sandy screamed.


“I never said that I didn’t want you to date him because he’s poor. I didn’t want you to date him, because I didn’t want you to drag him down. He’s a smart kid, and he has an excellent chance to make something of himself. I didn’t want your drama and your selfishness to screw that up for him. He’s going to college to get a good education. He has a bright future ahead of him. Perhaps, you will too, someday. For now, you need to get upstairs and start packing. We leave first thing in the morning.” Mr. Dickens’ shoulders slumped as his daughter wailed her way upstairs. He felt terrible about sending his only daughter away, but he saw no other choice. Hopefully, it would all work out in the end.


Author's Note: Sati was a young woman who married the god, Shiva. Sunity Devee tells her story in her book, Nine Ideal Indian Women. Sati's father, tasked with populating the universe, had married all of his daughters off to various gods. Sati was his youngest and his favorite. He was upset at her determination to marry Siva, as he was poor. However, Sati eventually got her way. Sati's father felt that Siva had insulted him during a yagna, so he determined to return the insult. The ultimate result of his machinations was his daughter's death/suicide. Committing suicide seems to be the immediate response to any and every difficulty that crops up throughout the various Indian epics and stories. It seems so ridiculous, and struck me as the reaction of a spoiled child. So, I portrayed Sati as exactly that. Although the father from the source story was a jerk, I thought that it would make a better contrast here to make her father a voice of reason.


BibliographyNine Ideal Indian Women by Sunity Devee. Web Source.

5 comments:

  1. Hi Nancy!
    This story definitely shows how ridiculous it is that all the women, and even some of the men, just kill themselves when things go wrong. It started with Sita, and just continued from there. Think I even added a note along those lines in my reading notes this week. And I love your picture too! That's some cool graffiti.

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  2. Hey Nancy,
    I’d just like to say how much I like your story. I also found it ridiculous how suicide was the answer to the problem in the stories we’ve been reading. I even remember putting it in my notes when Sita was about to commit suicide before Hanuman stopped her. I like how your story pointed how ridiculous it is.

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  3. Nancy,

    I thought your story was very well done. I liked that you used a lot of dialogue to really be able to give insight on the way your characters were feeling in your retelling. Your emphasis on dialogue is great for character development. You are able to see how people are feeling and also the way they interact with other people in their lives. I would maybe try to break up some of the long dialogue, but that is the only issue I see.

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  4. Nancy,

    This is a great depiction of a lot of women characters in the Indian Epics. It seems like so many of them are so attached to their husbands that they would threaten to kill themselves without them. The dialogue in your story makes the characters seem so real and relatable, and the way you described each one had the same effect. You are a gifted writer, and all of your grammar and sentence structure was top-notch! The content of your story was also great... I look forward to reading more of your stories!

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  5. Hey Nancy,

    Your story was interesting and it kept me engaged. I agree with others that suicide was a main theme for women in some of this Indian epics, as many died with their husbands. I thought that they could have portrayed as more independent women but aging this was way long ago so I can see why it was like that.

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