Hi Nancy! I really love the layout of your website. I'm also doing a google site, but mine looks nothing like that! I'm jealous, its just so clean and easy to navigate. I'm doing a storybook instead of a portfolio, so I'm excited to read different portfolios, but especially yours. I loved your first story and how you incorporated so many pictures into your story. It really gave me a sense and vision of what was happening in the story. I'm glad you didn't let anyone get eaten and how you changed what the goblins could do. By having them create an illusion of their appearance allowed them to lure in the men. I look forward to reading more of your stories! You do a very good job in retelling stories.
Hey Nancy! First off, something is very wrong with your website from my end. It might just be me, but the whole site kind of vibrates and moves around? I can't click on anything, but I managed to read your story! I really liked that none of the characters died in your version! I enjoyed that the story was largely the same but with much more detail and it was in your own words. I thought the pictures throughout the story were a great touch, and something I might incorporate into my own Storybook. I do love the way your site looks, I just wish I could figure out what's up with it. It might just be my browser, but I figured I'd let you know just in case. One thing I might add is some more color! The background is white but I think it would look pretty as a green perhaps? Whatever you choose, I look forward to reading some more of your stories. Your grammar and writing style are both top notch!
After reading your story on your project, I had so many ideas spring up for my own! This should be the goal of every writer-- to inspire! You certainly did this for me; the story was told in a way that I could picture the characters and the village in my mind. You choice of dialogue and imagery made the story relatable and easy to follow. As of now, this is one of my favorites I have read in this class. Also, I saw that this story was from a Jataka, and you reformed this story in a great way! Well done!
I like the background picture you chose to use for your main page as it shows many different characters that could be in your stories. It really draws me in to the variety your portfolio will have.
Your story "A Jungle Can Hide Many Secrets" was great. You are a very talented story teller and I am looking forward to seeing more of your work. I couldn't predict what was going to happen at any point and it was very well written. I really like that you added multiple pictures and the pictures that you chose really complemented your story. I am curious if the captain and his men ever wondered what happened to the "ladies'" previous husbands since Dakini said they were looking for new husbands.
You did an awesome job and your site looks great!
* I deleted the previous post due to a typo as I couldn't figure out how to edit. I didn't realize it would just show up the way that it does. Sorry about that.
Hi Nancy, It looks like you are off to a really great start on your project. I think your website looks great and it is really well structured. Your pictures go really well with the website. I like how you use more than one because it gives the reader a good visual of the story when they see that. I usually only use one image, but after seeing yours I really like the idea of that. It was fun reading your story and your title got me engaged immediately. You played the characters really well off each other and had good dialogue throughout the story. You kept the reader guessing what was going to happen next and it was a well put together story. I am excited to see how you develop your project of the semester and keep up the good work! Brooks
Hi Nancy! I think that the layout of your project, to begin with, is fantastic; I really love the images and the detail that went into it. Your pictures really fit the content and nature of your project. I really liked the layout of your stories, too. You add a good amount of dialogue between characters, and your titles are simple, yet catchy (like "Goblins"). I really like the changes you made to the original story in your Goblins story, since they manage to keep the general message of the original, yet are simple enough to be satisfying (such as the fact that the men do not disbelieve their captain the first time. Overall, great job, and keep up the good work!
Nancy, I'm choosing to comment over your Goblins story, though each were greatly written! You have such great detail, I was able to imagine the setting and picture the women as well as the mercenaries. The scene where you have Aiden catch the goblins in the women's outfits and eating someone was pretty gruesome and a tad disturbing, but it was perfect for your story! I like that you chose them to be mercenaries to provide for better background in your story. I've heard of this story before and read a rewritten version of it from another classmate of ours. His was quite interesting and definitely different from yours. I wondered what would have happened if he didn't know about them being goblins and/or if the others would defy him. Though, I know they would probably get eaten or something of the sort, but there could be interesting battles to survive in the story. Either way, I enjoyed your version very much, keep it up!
Hi Nancy! First off I would just like to say I love the layout and design of your blog! It looks really really good! I really liked how many pictures you used, it really helped me be able to visualize your story better! I have heard the story of the goblins before, but I think your version was very good! I liked your descriptions of the scenes and how it really made me feel like I was right there with the men! I thought it was interesting how you sort of pointed out that it should be odd that the main girl would be speaking perfect English, that was the first clue for me that maybe these women aren't someone you want to be friends with! Also one thing that caused a little bit of confusion for me is who was the man on the spit roast? Was it one of Aiden's men or just another random guy? Keep up the good work!!
I loved all your stories, but I’m focusing on Goblins, because it was my favorite one! I thought the beginning really grabbed you, especially the line about him not expecting his men to survive. And you did a great job with that twist! I was expecting that there was a group of goblins out in the jungle who had been stealing the men and children, not that the women were actually the goblins. I don’t really have much critiquing that I can do, because I think you did such a great job with this story. You could maybe go into a little more detail about the village, or explore if any of the other men were having these uneasy feelings. It could also be interesting to add that maybe the pilot had heard of this village, or travelers had been lost there before! Anyway, I think you did an awesome job with all of your stories!
Hey Nancy! I think that your layout for this blog is amazing because the background is such a smooth image. I also like the fact that you use multiple pictures because it allows the reader to visualize your material. I have never heard your stories but you were able to convey the story very well from what I can tell. The amount of detail you used in the action scenes were perfect especially with Aiden and the goblin creatures. I also thought that you truly made the girls almost disturbing in a sense that they were so scary. I really think that you have the right idea for your portfolio. One thing that I feel you did great on was your dialogue. I feel that I could use some of your dialogue to help myself with writing. I felt you were able to truly characterize people with your dialogue. Overall you did a great job.
I enjoyed reading your storybook collection, Valmiki’s Library. I only wish you would have had a post that explained the title to your storybook. I would love to know a little more about why you chose such a title.
Your first story Goblins, sure was interesting. At first I thought that the story was taking place in the past, so it hit me like a curve ball when you mentioned a helicopter. Other than that the story was so interesting to read. I never expected that the women were actually gobins. You could have put a little more effort into the escape in the end.
Your second story Brihannala’s Eyes, and your third story The Pig Who Pitied the Oxen were also very interesting. I very much enjoyed The Pig Who Pitied the Oxen. I liked how simple but enjoyable the story was. You did a wonderful job.
I loved your take on the goblins story. I am wondering who that man was that the goblin women were eating. The main character was able to save all of his men. Was that just a random person that they had stumbled upon?
Brihannala's Eyes is a wonderfully written story. You did a lot of research going into this story, and your hard work is apparent. I like how you had the main character change his opinion on women in his society. He became more compassionate and empathetic toward the princess. It was a bit of a surprise at the end that the main character ended up being one of the old men that the princess was supposed to marry.
The Pig Who Pitied the Oxen is a great story. I love how you explored the Pig's point of view. Reading the original story you agree with the oxen, that envying the pig is not worthwhile. However, the living a shorter life in comfort would seem more appealing for some people.
You have written some marvelous stories, and I cannot wait to see what you come up with next!
Hi Nancy! I had so much fun reading your posts. Your introduction was short and sweet, and straight to the point, which I really like. “Goblins” was such a good read. My favorite part was when the village was discovered. I was not expecting that, and I really liked how there is a little bit of mystery involved in the story. In “Brihannala’s Eyes” my favorite part was how you mentioned that getting married without a say was silly. It shows what should’ve been the obvious, but isn’t. I did wonder about why your author’s note was so long. What if you shortened that a bit like the introduction where you include all the elements, but don’t overwhelm your readers? Other than that, I thought you did a great job writing your stories. The format was very easy to follow, which I appreciate. I also liked the pictures you chose to include.
I picked your story from the list this week because I thought the idea of calling it a library was really cool. Your site looked so awesome! I really liked your color scheme. I am not sure if you did that on purpose or not but it seemed really cohesive. I especially liked your first story and all the pictures you threw in. It was nice that you added several pictures instead of just one. It really helped me to visualize. I was glad that your story ended on a more positive note with all the men surviving. It was definitely tragic that some got eaten in the original story. I was glad to see you changed that up! But I really liked how you write. It was very interesting to read. But I think you really have done a great job so far on your website. I can’t wait to see the finished project soon.
Hey Nancy. First of all, I really like the layout and design of your site. It is easily navigable and the design is pretty and consistent throughout the whole site. Also I like how your stories have lots of pictures. I think it helps people easily imagine the story you are envisioning especially for the first two stories where there are some places that some people need help imagining. My favorite story has got to be Brihannala. I like how in the end he came to stand how women felt back. Your stories were all well written. The author’s notes were all good at explaining the original stories and what you changed about them and why you changed them. I also like how you would describe terms that others might not be familiar with like how in Brihannala you described zenana. It’s really helpful to others who might not know the term and also helps to imagine things easier.
Hi there Nancy! I am just dropping in from the Myth-Folklore class to leave some comments about your storybook :) I reallyyyyy love the idea you chose for your storybook. All of the photos you used remind me of the Life of Buddha Unit that we had in our Asian unit, maybe you guys got to see that unit as well? Regardless, the photos from that unit were my absolute favorite. Always so decorated, and elaborate, with lots of colors- much like the vibrant words used within the stories! From what I read, the ideas are fairly the same, so when I have a free moment, I hope I can read some of the Jakata tales. The only aesthetic thing I can comment in is the design of your storybook. Many of the colors appear to be clashing, and it makes it hard to focus on the important things. So perhaps just changing it to a solid color, and letting the images speak for themselves? Regardless, great job so far, happy writing! :)
I really enjoyed reading your stories and think you have done a great job on your project so far. One of the first things I saw that I really liked was all the pictures that helped explain and give some color to your writing. I like it when I can put and image to some writing and you did a great job of that with this project. I enjoyed reading the pig and the oxen story as I almost did one of my stories over that just this last week. I like how the oxen are fed up with not getting the good food but in the end they obviously win out. I am excited to read more of these stories in the future as I love reading the Jakata stories that we have been going through these last couple weeks. Keep up the good work and hopefully I will get to comment on more stories in the future.
I love the layout of your webpage. I thought you created a good theme and background for your choice of stories. I feel like it is very mysterious and thrilling when you mix the colors and pictures of your page. I also enjoyed how you made your stories revolve around a few foundational stories. My favorite of the three you have so far is the first one about Goblins. I thought that you did a great job taking the original story and making it into your own. You also had great selections for your photos. This is a critical point in these stories in my opinion because it is the only source of a visual in these stroybooks if you decide not to put a video. Great job on your project so far. I am looking forward to coming back to your page and reading more in the future.
Hi, Nancy! I enjoyed reading your new stories and I especially enjoyed all the pictures you had to go along with all of your stories. I always have a difficult time coming up with pictures to help go along with my story, but you've done a great job! I really liked your story "the pig and the oxen". I read the original story and I liked how you put your own twist on it and switched the two main characters. Death is always an interesting character to implement into stories just because its inevitable and giving it a life of its own can be fun! Keep up the good work!
Nancy, I had never visited your portfolio project before today, so I am glad that I finally had a chance! I was taken by your third story, The Pig Who Pitied the Oxen. The tale went much differently than I thought that it would. Originally, when the pig was eating all of this great food and pitying the oxen, I thought that some doom was going to come for him. Surely enough, he was being fattened for slaughter like I thought. However, what happened next really surprised me. I thought that the oxen would tell the pig that he was going to be killed and that the pig would either not believe them and be killed anyway or be horrified and be killed anyway. Instead, the pig has always known that he was going to die! That made considering the story up until then really eye-opening. The pig still values his situation more than the oxen, because even though he is going to die after he has been afforded his luxuries, at least he will have lived a happy life. I thought that this was kind of inspirational in a way. Great job on this!
Hi Nancy! I had never visited your portfolio before today, I am glad I found it! I really enjoyed your third story about the pig and the oxen. I actually read the original as well and wrote a story a couple of weeks ago retelling the tale using hot dogs and hamburgers. I really like the way you switched the telling of the story. I didn't think of doing it that way myself but I really enjoyed it. I was really surprised when you revealed that the pig already knew he was being fattened up for slaughter. I thought that was a really interesting way to take the story as opposed the having the pig pity the oxen because he thought he was just special. I also really like the way you designed your site. I like that you have multiple images on your stories, I think that adds a lot to the overall page. Great job!
Hi Nancy! I'd never gotten your portfolio on random until now, the end of the semester, so it is interesting to see a brand new project that is fully completed. Overall I really like the stories you chose to tell. I wish the introduction page tied them together in some way, even if it was just explaining a similar source for all of them, but the stories themselves are quite good.
The pig who pittied the oxen for example is a very interesting story. The moral of it is truly a strongly opinionated piece and I think you did well to keep it alive and strong. The changes you made were subtle, but I think it helps to put the reader in the mind of the character who is in the "right"
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Hi Nancy! I really love the layout of your website. I'm also doing a google site, but mine looks nothing like that! I'm jealous, its just so clean and easy to navigate. I'm doing a storybook instead of a portfolio, so I'm excited to read different portfolios, but especially yours. I loved your first story and how you incorporated so many pictures into your story. It really gave me a sense and vision of what was happening in the story. I'm glad you didn't let anyone get eaten and how you changed what the goblins could do. By having them create an illusion of their appearance allowed them to lure in the men. I look forward to reading more of your stories! You do a very good job in retelling stories.
ReplyDeleteHey Nancy! First off, something is very wrong with your website from my end. It might just be me, but the whole site kind of vibrates and moves around? I can't click on anything, but I managed to read your story! I really liked that none of the characters died in your version! I enjoyed that the story was largely the same but with much more detail and it was in your own words. I thought the pictures throughout the story were a great touch, and something I might incorporate into my own Storybook. I do love the way your site looks, I just wish I could figure out what's up with it. It might just be my browser, but I figured I'd let you know just in case. One thing I might add is some more color! The background is white but I think it would look pretty as a green perhaps? Whatever you choose, I look forward to reading some more of your stories. Your grammar and writing style are both top notch!
ReplyDeleteNancy,
ReplyDeleteAfter reading your story on your project, I had so many ideas spring up for my own! This should be the goal of every writer-- to inspire! You certainly did this for me; the story was told in a way that I could picture the characters and the village in my mind. You choice of dialogue and imagery made the story relatable and easy to follow. As of now, this is one of my favorites I have read in this class. Also, I saw that this story was from a Jataka, and you reformed this story in a great way! Well done!
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ReplyDeleteHi Nancy!
ReplyDeleteI like the background picture you chose to use for your main page as it shows many different characters that could be in your stories. It really draws me in to the variety your portfolio will have.
Your story "A Jungle Can Hide Many Secrets" was great. You are a very talented story teller and I am looking forward to seeing more of your work. I couldn't predict what was going to happen at any point and it was very well written. I really like that you added multiple pictures and the pictures that you chose really complemented your story. I am curious if the captain and his men ever wondered what happened to the "ladies'" previous husbands since Dakini said they were looking for new husbands.
You did an awesome job and your site looks great!
* I deleted the previous post due to a typo as I couldn't figure out how to edit. I didn't realize it would just show up the way that it does. Sorry about that.
Hi Nancy,
ReplyDeleteIt looks like you are off to a really great start on your project. I think your website looks great and it is really well structured. Your pictures go really well with the website. I like how you use more than one because it gives the reader a good visual of the story when they see that. I usually only use one image, but after seeing yours I really like the idea of that. It was fun reading your story and your title got me engaged immediately. You played the characters really well off each other and had good dialogue throughout the story. You kept the reader guessing what was going to happen next and it was a well put together story. I am excited to see how you develop your project of the semester and keep up the good work!
Brooks
Hi Nancy! I think that the layout of your project, to begin with, is fantastic; I really love the images and the detail that went into it. Your pictures really fit the content and nature of your project. I really liked the layout of your stories, too. You add a good amount of dialogue between characters, and your titles are simple, yet catchy (like "Goblins"). I really like the changes you made to the original story in your Goblins story, since they manage to keep the general message of the original, yet are simple enough to be satisfying (such as the fact that the men do not disbelieve their captain the first time. Overall, great job, and keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteNancy, I'm choosing to comment over your Goblins story, though each were greatly written! You have such great detail, I was able to imagine the setting and picture the women as well as the mercenaries. The scene where you have Aiden catch the goblins in the women's outfits and eating someone was pretty gruesome and a tad disturbing, but it was perfect for your story! I like that you chose them to be mercenaries to provide for better background in your story. I've heard of this story before and read a rewritten version of it from another classmate of ours. His was quite interesting and definitely different from yours. I wondered what would have happened if he didn't know about them being goblins and/or if the others would defy him. Though, I know they would probably get eaten or something of the sort, but there could be interesting battles to survive in the story. Either way, I enjoyed your version very much, keep it up!
ReplyDeleteHi Nancy! First off I would just like to say I love the layout and design of your blog! It looks really really good! I really liked how many pictures you used, it really helped me be able to visualize your story better! I have heard the story of the goblins before, but I think your version was very good! I liked your descriptions of the scenes and how it really made me feel like I was right there with the men! I thought it was interesting how you sort of pointed out that it should be odd that the main girl would be speaking perfect English, that was the first clue for me that maybe these women aren't someone you want to be friends with! Also one thing that caused a little bit of confusion for me is who was the man on the spit roast? Was it one of Aiden's men or just another random guy? Keep up the good work!!
ReplyDeleteHi Nancy!
ReplyDeleteI loved all your stories, but I’m focusing on Goblins, because it was my favorite one! I thought the beginning really grabbed you, especially the line about him not expecting his men to survive. And you did a great job with that twist! I was expecting that there was a group of goblins out in the jungle who had been stealing the men and children, not that the women were actually the goblins. I don’t really have much critiquing that I can do, because I think you did such a great job with this story. You could maybe go into a little more detail about the village, or explore if any of the other men were having these uneasy feelings. It could also be interesting to add that maybe the pilot had heard of this village, or travelers had been lost there before! Anyway, I think you did an awesome job with all of your stories!
Hey Nancy! I think that your layout for this blog is amazing because the background is such a smooth image. I also like the fact that you use multiple pictures because it allows the reader to visualize your material. I have never heard your stories but you were able to convey the story very well from what I can tell. The amount of detail you used in the action scenes were perfect especially with Aiden and the goblin creatures. I also thought that you truly made the girls almost disturbing in a sense that they were so scary. I really think that you have the right idea for your portfolio. One thing that I feel you did great on was your dialogue. I feel that I could use some of your dialogue to help myself with writing. I felt you were able to truly characterize people with your dialogue. Overall you did a great job.
ReplyDeleteHi Nancy!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your storybook collection, Valmiki’s Library. I only wish you would have had a post that explained the title to your storybook. I would love to know a little more about why you chose such a title.
Your first story Goblins, sure was interesting. At first I thought that the story was taking place in the past, so it hit me like a curve ball when you mentioned a helicopter. Other than that the story was so interesting to read. I never expected that the women were actually gobins. You could have put a little more effort into the escape in the end.
Your second story Brihannala’s Eyes, and your third story The Pig Who Pitied the Oxen were also very interesting. I very much enjoyed The Pig Who Pitied the Oxen. I liked how simple but enjoyable the story was. You did a wonderful job.
Hello Nancy!
ReplyDeleteI loved your take on the goblins story. I am wondering who that man was that the goblin women were eating. The main character was able to save all of his men. Was that just a random person that they had stumbled upon?
Brihannala's Eyes is a wonderfully written story. You did a lot of research going into this story, and your hard work is apparent. I like how you had the main character change his opinion on women in his society. He became more compassionate and empathetic toward the princess. It was a bit of a surprise at the end that the main character ended up being one of the old men that the princess was supposed to marry.
The Pig Who Pitied the Oxen is a great story. I love how you explored the Pig's point of view. Reading the original story you agree with the oxen, that envying the pig is not worthwhile. However, the living a shorter life in comfort would seem more appealing for some people.
You have written some marvelous stories, and I cannot wait to see what you come up with next!
Hi Nancy! I had so much fun reading your posts. Your introduction was short and sweet, and straight to the point, which I really like. “Goblins” was such a good read. My favorite part was when the village was discovered. I was not expecting that, and I really liked how there is a little bit of mystery involved in the story. In “Brihannala’s Eyes” my favorite part was how you mentioned that getting married without a say was silly. It shows what should’ve been the obvious, but isn’t. I did wonder about why your author’s note was so long. What if you shortened that a bit like the introduction where you include all the elements, but don’t overwhelm your readers? Other than that, I thought you did a great job writing your stories. The format was very easy to follow, which I appreciate. I also liked the pictures you chose to include.
ReplyDeleteHey Nancy!
ReplyDeleteI picked your story from the list this week because I thought the idea of calling it a library was really cool. Your site looked so awesome! I really liked your color scheme. I am not sure if you did that on purpose or not but it seemed really cohesive. I especially liked your first story and all the pictures you threw in. It was nice that you added several pictures instead of just one. It really helped me to visualize. I was glad that your story ended on a more positive note with all the men surviving. It was definitely tragic that some got eaten in the original story. I was glad to see you changed that up! But I really liked how you write. It was very interesting to read. But I think you really have done a great job so far on your website. I can’t wait to see the finished project soon.
Hey Nancy.
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I really like the layout and design of your site. It is easily navigable and the design is pretty and consistent throughout the whole site. Also I like how your stories have lots of pictures. I think it helps people easily imagine the story you are envisioning especially for the first two stories where there are some places that some people need help imagining. My favorite story has got to be Brihannala. I like how in the end he came to stand how women felt back. Your stories were all well written. The author’s notes were all good at explaining the original stories and what you changed about them and why you changed them. I also like how you would describe terms that others might not be familiar with like how in Brihannala you described zenana. It’s really helpful to others who might not know the term and also helps to imagine things easier.
Hi there Nancy! I am just dropping in from the Myth-Folklore class to leave some comments about your storybook :)
ReplyDeleteI reallyyyyy love the idea you chose for your storybook. All of the photos you used remind me of the Life of Buddha Unit that we had in our Asian unit, maybe you guys got to see that unit as well? Regardless, the photos from that unit were my absolute favorite. Always so decorated, and elaborate, with lots of colors- much like the vibrant words used within the stories! From what I read, the ideas are fairly the same, so when I have a free moment, I hope I can read some of the Jakata tales.
The only aesthetic thing I can comment in is the design of your storybook. Many of the colors appear to be clashing, and it makes it hard to focus on the important things. So perhaps just changing it to a solid color, and letting the images speak for themselves?
Regardless, great job so far, happy writing! :)
Nancy,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your stories and think you have done a great job on your project so far. One of the first things I saw that I really liked was all the pictures that helped explain and give some color to your writing. I like it when I can put and image to some writing and you did a great job of that with this project. I enjoyed reading the pig and the oxen story as I almost did one of my stories over that just this last week. I like how the oxen are fed up with not getting the good food but in the end they obviously win out. I am excited to read more of these stories in the future as I love reading the Jakata stories that we have been going through these last couple weeks. Keep up the good work and hopefully I will get to comment on more stories in the future.
Hi Nancy,
ReplyDeleteI love the layout of your webpage. I thought you created a good theme and background for your choice of stories. I feel like it is very mysterious and thrilling when you mix the colors and pictures of your page. I also enjoyed how you made your stories revolve around a few foundational stories. My favorite of the three you have so far is the first one about Goblins. I thought that you did a great job taking the original story and making it into your own. You also had great selections for your photos. This is a critical point in these stories in my opinion because it is the only source of a visual in these stroybooks if you decide not to put a video. Great job on your project so far. I am looking forward to coming back to your page and reading more in the future.
Brooks
Hi, Nancy! I enjoyed reading your new stories and I especially enjoyed all the pictures you had to go along with all of your stories. I always have a difficult time coming up with pictures to help go along with my story, but you've done a great job! I really liked your story "the pig and the oxen". I read the original story and I liked how you put your own twist on it and switched the two main characters. Death is always an interesting character to implement into stories just because its inevitable and giving it a life of its own can be fun! Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteNancy, I had never visited your portfolio project before today, so I am glad that I finally had a chance! I was taken by your third story, The Pig Who Pitied the Oxen. The tale went much differently than I thought that it would. Originally, when the pig was eating all of this great food and pitying the oxen, I thought that some doom was going to come for him. Surely enough, he was being fattened for slaughter like I thought. However, what happened next really surprised me. I thought that the oxen would tell the pig that he was going to be killed and that the pig would either not believe them and be killed anyway or be horrified and be killed anyway. Instead, the pig has always known that he was going to die! That made considering the story up until then really eye-opening. The pig still values his situation more than the oxen, because even though he is going to die after he has been afforded his luxuries, at least he will have lived a happy life. I thought that this was kind of inspirational in a way. Great job on this!
ReplyDeleteHi Nancy! I had never visited your portfolio before today, I am glad I found it! I really enjoyed your third story about the pig and the oxen. I actually read the original as well and wrote a story a couple of weeks ago retelling the tale using hot dogs and hamburgers. I really like the way you switched the telling of the story. I didn't think of doing it that way myself but I really enjoyed it. I was really surprised when you revealed that the pig already knew he was being fattened up for slaughter. I thought that was a really interesting way to take the story as opposed the having the pig pity the oxen because he thought he was just special. I also really like the way you designed your site. I like that you have multiple images on your stories, I think that adds a lot to the overall page. Great job!
ReplyDeleteHi Nancy! I'd never gotten your portfolio on random until now, the end of the semester, so it is interesting to see a brand new project that is fully completed. Overall I really like the stories you chose to tell. I wish the introduction page tied them together in some way, even if it was just explaining a similar source for all of them, but the stories themselves are quite good.
ReplyDeleteThe pig who pittied the oxen for example is a very interesting story. The moral of it is truly a strongly opinionated piece and I think you did well to keep it alive and strong. The changes you made were subtle, but I think it helps to put the reader in the mind of the character who is in the "right"